Amsterdam This is a good start to an outline, and now I would like you to focus more on the second half development. I would like to see more supporting evidence throughout. For instance, you can add personal experience, history, definitions or background information, statistics, other facts, hypothetical scenarios, or other pieces of detail to help support your point. I have highlighted what I believe to be your thesis statement. For your final Unit 9 project, I would like for you to start thinking…
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