David 11/12/12
ENG101.SEC106
Dr. Susan Rodriguez

Correction sheet

Original/sentence: “David tries to pursue the readers in believing that over weight people are not to blame for their obesity.”

Correction/sentence: “David tries to pursued the readers to believe that over weight people are not to blame for their obesity.”

Reason for correction: Because “pursue” is now and “believing” is past tense

Original/sentence: “Well see more sick and obese children and more angry and litigious parents”

Correction/sentence: “We’ll see more sick and obese children and more angry and litigious parents”

Reason for correction: Because “we’ll” means we will which is the correct phrase

Original/sentence: “There are a few things that brought to my attention as I read the article which I disagree with. I disagree with…”

Correction/sentence: “There are a few things that were brought to my attention as I read the article. I disagree with…”

Reason for correction: Because “were” is past tense on something that was brought to my attention

Original/sentence: “….People rather poke friends on face book…”

Correction/sentence: “….People would rather poke friends on face book…”

Reason for correction: Because “would” phrases the word of someone doing something

Original/sentence: “Another statement which I disagree on is his believe that its it’s hard for consumers to find healthy food choices”

Correction/sentence: “Another statement which I disagree on is his belief that its it’s hard for consumers to find healthy food choices”

Reason for correction: Because “believe” is a verb and “belief “ is a noun

Original/sentence: “Fruits and vegies are example of healthy product…”

Correction/sentence: “Fruits and vegetables are example of healthy product…”

Reason for correction: Because “vegies” is not proper English, is more like slang